Good Points:
- Yasmin uses all the main and relevant theorists with examples relating to her final product.
- Her research and planning section has been explained in a detailed format making it easy to understand.
- All of her points have been mentioned in depth and also explained too.
- Good use of terminology - referred to theorists' main ideas and explained them too.
- Identified her problems that she faced during the process.
- Used a numerous amount of examples, referring to other music videos and where their inspiration came from.
- Explained how they went against stereotypes.
Improvements:
- There is a lot of information and it may be unrealistic to write this much in the real exam due to time constraints (I don't know if Yasmin completed this essay in timed conditions or not!)
- Maybe you could be more critical of your own work instead of praising it all the time!
Pretty amazing to be honest. Level 4.
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